"Dear Candace,
Thank you for your submission of "The
Friend Zone" to Fireside, but we've decided not to accept it for
publication. Please forgive the form letter, but due to the high volume
of submissions we can't respond personally on each story. We appreciate
your interest in Fireside.
Sincerely,
X X"Enjoy!
The Friend
Zone
By csrulebreaker
Yvette knew
she was attracted to Joel the first time she saw him in the dark pub. He wore
faded jeans, a Star Trek t-shirt and a red Live Long and Prosper ball cap. She
loved men who sported well-loved and fitted ball caps. Something about seeing
the hat on his head and how it framed his face made her feel alive and
interested.
Yvette had
been a member of the weekly trivia group for three years and this was the first
time she encountered a man who was cute and shared her love of Star Trek. She
was seated at the opposite end of the table from Joel and she didn’t have much
opportunity to talk to him. However, she spent the rest of the night ignoring
the trivia and daydreamed about Joel.
She called her
three closest friends the next week before trivia to have them help her figure
out the best way to connect with Joel.
Quickly, they decided the best option was for everyone to arrive early
and to leave only one seat open right next to her. While she was at work that week she found
herself doodling his name on her notepad and daydreaming about their next encounter.
The more she thought about him the more infatuated she became however, she
didn’t want to enter the dreaded friend zone with him. That was always her big move
and her biggest mistake. To boost her
confidence on Thursday she wore her Star Trek t-shirt, earrings and panties.
Her plan
worked and she and her friends arrived well before Joel. When he arrived he
took the only available seat, right next to her, and both games began. She was nervous and excited. As they started their
conversation she could almost hear her heart melting and feel herself fall into
infatuation. Yvette asked him about his favorite Dr. Who episode and the conversation
flowed easily between them. He was shy but willing to share his personal
information and she soaked up everything she could learn from him. However, she
couldn’t tell if he was interested. He
seemed to treat her the same way he treated everyone else. Was that an indication of disinterest or was
he shy around women?
The third
week Yvette saw Joel was pivotal. She had a plan. She had a horrible habit of
falling into the dreaded friend zone with every man she met. She would talk to
them, be friendly and attentive but nothing. Often he would date one of her
friends and her fragile heart would be crushed. She knew whatever happened that
she didn’t want to fall into the friend zone with Joel and she decided to ask
him on a date. She wouldn’t normally be so bold and ask a man out but she
didn’t want to repeat her past mistakes. That was her “goto” move. Make friends
and hope it would turn into something better.
Up until this point that tactic allowed her to make many friends and no
boyfriends. She decided it was time for a change.
The evening
went well. The group came in second
place in that week’s trivia challenge and she kept up a friendly banter with
Joel. At the end of the evening she lingered around the table and hoped to have
a private word with him. Her heart pounded out of her chest and her hands were
cold and clammy. She took a deep breath and blurted out, “Joel, would you like
to meet for drinks tomorrow night?”
“Sure, who
else will be there?”
What-the-hell!
She looked directly at him and said, “Just us. Usually, only two people go on a
date.”
“Um, uh.Um.
Ok, good. That sounds good. See you tomorrow night.”
She thought
carefully before she dressed for the date. She wanted to get the right mix of cute
and nerdy while incorporating sexy. She wanted to be viewed as an available
woman and not as a friend. She decided to wear her low rise, perfectly faded
jeans with a tight black scoop neck top with a tiny Star Trek symbol on the
right side. She added her best geek jewelry and even spent forty-five minutes
preparing her makeup. After a few minutes of indecision, she decided to go for
the black knee high boots and not the sneakers. She had to keep reminding
herself that she wasn’t trying to make a new friend and she needed to make a
serious attempt to be attractive.
She arrived
ten minutes early and he was already there. She smiled to herself and walked
over to Joel sitting at the long mahogany bar. He got up as she walked over and
pointed to a two person booth in the corner. She was impressed that he decided
to move to a more intimate space with her.
As soon as
they sat down the conversation flowed smoothly. They had so many interests and
hobbies in common. She often had intense and enjoyable conversations with
people but it felt different with Joel. The words and opinions came out of her
mouth so easily. There was never a lull in the conversation or an awkward moment
and she felt her attraction mounting as the evening progressed.
The pub
began to thin out and Yvette realized they had sat and talked for four and a
half hours. That was an amazing amount of time to spend on a first date, but it
was time for it to end. Yvette got up and Joel followed her outside to her car.
She turned around to say goodnight and she was swooped into his arms. He gave
her a passionate kiss that lasted forever. Yvette’s mind turned off during the
kiss and she fell into the moment. When the passion subsided Joel gave her a
bear hug and put her in the car.
The date
was a success and Yvette was thrilled. She had successfully avoided the dreaded
friend zone.
4 comments:
Candace, this is Richard from the writer's group. I think your short story was very well written and I am surprised why it got rejected. You have a real nice blog. You should check out mine.
Hi Candi!
I liked your story... but with all of the Star Trek and Dr. Who references, I half expected Joel to be a time traveling alien! (I wish the Doctor would come and sweep me away!) I LOVE DOCTOR WHO!!!
No, all kidding aside, and as a previous small press publisher, (I don't know if you knew that about me), I got TONS of submissions and just couldn't publish them all. It's just a matter of perseverance. Keep Trying! And there are other zines out there wanting submissions. If this is something you want to pursue, keep trying!
Miss you!
Cari
Thanks Richard. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
Hey Cari-
I didn't know you were a small publisher. To bad you don't do that anymore;) BTW...thanks for the encouragement.
Miss you too!!!!
Hey, I'm going to share with you what accomplished fiction writers have shared with me, "Show, don't tell". I'm sure you've heard that before, right? The concept/idea is a good one,though.
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